美国签证白皮书/边霁-Maryland-ME

Maryland/ME 上海交通大学本科

案例特点:全奖+上海签证

最后这个案例我们准备了包括准备各个阶段的完全版

Version 1.包括所有问题

1) What will you study in the United States?

Mechanical Engineering in University of Maryland-College Park, and my specialization will be Thermal Fluid Sciences.

2) What is your major? In what aspect of your major will you study?

SHORT: Currently, my major is Thermal Energy and Power Engineering, which is a branch of Mechanical Engineering. And I will go on my studying in this aspect.LONG: Currently, I'm an undergraduate majoring in Thermal Energy and Power Engineering in Shanghai Jiao Tong University. My current major is a branch of mechanical engineering in UMCP that is thermal fluid sciences. What I'll focus on is refrigeration and energy conservation, mainly about integrated energy system: BCHP (Building, Cooling, Heating, Power). This system can make on-site power generation for buildings, and meanwhile, the thermal energy that otherwise is wasted can be utilized to provide heating and cooling for the building, which is more efficient and environmentally benign.

3) What will you do in USA?

Studying.I'll study in UMCP for about 5 years to get my Ph. D. degree in mechanical engineering.

4) Are you going to study in USA?

Yes.

5) When/where did you get your BS/MS?

I'll get my BS from Shanghai Jiao Tong University this July.

6) What/where are you studying now?

I'm a senior in Shanghai Jiao Tong University now, and I'm majoring in Thermal Energy and Power Engineering.

7) How long will you study in USA?

About 5 years.

8) Have you any scholarship?

Yes, I'm awarded a Graduate Research Assistantship. It includes tuition waive, subsidization for health insurance and a living stipend of $21,068 per year.

9) What do you want to study in USA?

I'll study Mechanical Engineering, specializing in Thermal Fluid Sciences in UMCP.

10) What do you do with your work for BS/MS/PhD?

I'll take courses, as well as do research work in the center for environmental energy engineering.

11) What is your purpose for the Visa?

To study in the States and pursue my PhD Degree in Mechanical Engineering in UMCP.

12) What is your academic background?

SHORT: I'm currently an undergraduate senior in Shanghai Jiao Tong University. LONG: I've been studying in the department of thermal energy and power engineering in SJTU since fall, 1999, and I'm going to get my BS degree this July.

13) How do you know this Univ.?

SHORT: University of Maryland-College Park holds a high reputation of their graduate education and research work in the engineering field. What's more, the program which I will participate in there is very excellent.LONG: UMCP is a famous research university. I first got to know it when I was browsing through the engineering graduate school's ranking page made by us news, and it's among top 20. Then, when a professor in our department knew that I wanna go to the States for graduate study, he recommended this university and the center for environmental energy engineering in it strongly. Then I got to know about this research center in which I will be a graduate research assistant, and I'm really very interested in it. That' how I know this university, and why I chose it at last.

14) What is your plan? What will you do after graduation?

Well, if everything goes well, I'll get my PhD Degree within 5 years and back home then.Generally, I hope to be a researcher in my field, integrated energy system. This project is important and meaningful to energy conservation and environment protection, and is highly valued. Now there're many big companies that are very interested in this project, and, so far as I know, the government of Shanghai is interested in it too. Currently, my professor in SJTU is discussing with the government about establishing a new research center for this project here, so my first choice will be entering this center and be one of the main researchers in it. Besides, since many big companies who have got their own research centers in Shanghai are also interested in developing this technology themselves, I believe there will be good positions available for me when I graduate. So I can also be a researcher in these centers in Shanghai.

15) Give me three reasons that you will come back to China?

Ok.1, The reason why I'm now leaving home is to some extent for my parents. I'm the only kid in my family. My entering the top engineering school in the States are making my parents feel proud of me; and I believe that, I can provide them a better life when I come back, and, I'm the only one who can, and must take care of them. My parents are moving back to my mother's hometown, Hangzhou, in 2 years after their retirement, and that's a reason why I choose to back to Shanghai instead of Xi'an.2, Integrated energy system, which will be my focus during my graduate study, will have a prosperous future here in China, and especially in Shanghai. I'm sure that most companies in this area will have research positions available here then. What's more, my professor in SJTU will found a new research center in alliance with the government of Shanghai, and I can enter this center to go on my research work. I do think I can get a good position here after graduation.3, In my point of view, this system may have the best foreground in China than in any other country else. 'Cause we got so many utilities that can cut their energy cost through using this system. And, also, then it will be supported by the government. So I deem what I'll learn in the next 5 years can be better used here.Frankly, I don't think any reason is needed for one to come home. At least for me, there's no reason to not back home after graduation.

16) Can you explain why 90% Chinese students didn't come back?

I don't know, they might have their own consideration, probably for their career I think. However, I don't think I would stay in the States after graduation. I will have a promising career and I'll be unable to take good care of my parents there.

17) Why do you choose this Univ.?

UMCP is a famous research university, its graduate engineering education was ranked 19th by us news last year, and 16th this year. And, the center for environmental energy engineering is highly valued in its field. And that's the very one that I'll do my research work in during my graduate study. What's more, my future advisor there is an internationally recognized specialist in the thermal fluid sciences area, from whom I believe that I can learn much.

18) Why do you like your major?

I have to say frankly that this major wasn't my first choice when entering SJTU. However, after 4 years' studying in it, I found it more and more interesting, and also, meaningful to people's daily life and future, and I liked it more and more.（长回答加上）Take what I'll focus on for example. Integrated energy system. About 70% energy is cost by buildings today, through cooling, heating, and power supply. You know, in most cases, electric power is generated by thermal energy, and then, some of the power is used for cooling and heating. But in the process, much thermal energy is wasted, and also some electric power is wasted while being used for cooling and heating. This system can make use of the thermal energy which would otherwise be wasted for cooling and heating. Through the using of this system, we can conserve much energy and meanwhile, protect the environment.

19) Why do you want to study in USA?

As well known, the graduate schools in the States have the most advanced technology and best faculty in the world. Also, I think that there're much more to learn, like their attitude toward their research work and their innovation spirit, which are of great importance to a researcher..

20) Why do you want to pursue a doctor's degree? + Why PhD at Maryland?

Because I want to be a researcher in the future, and I can be better prepared through pursuing a doctor's degree.

21) Why do you receive financial aid from this Univ.?

I think that's because of my excellent academic achievements and unusual research experience as an undergraduate.

22) What is the difficult class do you have?

Physical Education, I'm afraid. I'm not good at sports.

23) Do you want your wife to go with you?

I don't, and I won't have one.

24) Why do you change your major?

I don't…

25) What's the difference between your major now and the major in USA?

Exactly, there's no big difference between them. My major in USA will be more specific and more concentrated than my current major, but basically, they got no big difference.

Version 2.根据25问和我的专业特点,具体指导我修改了Why PhD和回国计划

26) Why do you want to pursue a doctor's degree? Why PhD in Maryland?

Actually, I'm not just going to pursue a doctoral degree. What I really want is to have my graduate study in Maryland, exactly speaking, to learn about integrated energy system under the instruction of Prof. Radermacher. I'm very interested in this program, which has great potential in China, while now there's few people here verse in it, so I want to be a researcher of it. And the PhD graduate study there can best fit my career objective.I started to be attracted by the integrated energy system ever since I got to know it through a professor's introduction about that. (generally speaking, it can make on site power generation, and in the meantime, the thermal energy, which will otherwise be wasted, can be used for cooling and heating. So, through using this system, energy resources can be greatly saved and also, it's very good for environmental protection. You know, it's financially beneficial and also meaningful to people.) And, Maryland has one of the best research centers for this system in the world, besides, my future advisor, Prof. Radermacher is an internationally recognized expert in this area. Actually, I was recommended to him by the professor who introduced this system to me last fall, and I do think learning in this center, under his advising, is the best choice for my graduate study.

很快,他们反馈发回的修改建议：

Too complicated and messed up. You should put it in this way, like:

a. I just don't want any...

b. I am interested in this area and a PhD will help me to learn more, esp. Maryland's PhD in…

c. This area is very promising and a degree from Maryland will enable me to find a very satisfactory position in a leading…company/government

Rocky的修改建议：

Talk more about your contact with this professor in a more straightforward way and emphasize that it was through your constant correspondence with this Prof. that made you determined to go to Maryland Univ.

Topic sentences are needed to summarize your main ideas and points. You should mention the topic sentences first to give the VO and clear and concise point, and then elaborate if the VO is interested and time allows. You don't want to beat around the bush and make people confused at all.

3 plans

1, The professor who has recommended me to Prof. Radermacher is now discussing with Shanghai government about establishing a new research center for integrated energy system, which will be my focus in the next 5 years. The government is very interested in this project, you know, it can save lots of energy and is environmentally benign. But in China, the research of it is just at its beginning, so they badly need researchers that can take the job. I hope I can join this center and do my best there after graduation.

2, Many big corporations are very interested in this new system, as it's very beneficial. And many of them have research institutes in shanghai, some of them are in the consortium with the CEEE center in Maryland. As you know, there're many big buildings in Shanghai, and the price of energy is rising by the using of natural gas here, so this city will be a big market with great potential. Since researchers are very important to develop a new technology, yet here in China, this technology is at its beginning,) I'm sure that I can find a good position in one of them in Shanghai after graduation.http://www.enme.umd.edu/ceee/bchp/consortium.htm（这个是 consortium的名单，不过我不知道应不应该带去，因为里面有很多美国的公司还有美国能源部）

3，Frankly, I have discussed with my friends about the possibility of establishing our own company in Shanghai 5 years later. With the great demand of market, I do think this will be a feasible way and could be very beneficial.

针对画线部分（new technology），Rocky的建议是：

I think refinement is a better way of expression. The VO might ask you "what if you can't find a NEW technology?" You should concentrate on the great potential of reusage of energy recycling of energy or key words like "profitable" or "energy conservation", etc.)Also pls search for supporting material on the web or from some documents (remember Gu, Yang printed IBM, MS recruiting webpage, the webpage of a CMU alum who became a MS top manager)　　

Version 3.根据上述修改建议,我修改了两个核心问题,并在Rocky的指导下,准备了补充材料。

I just don't want any PhD degree. Actually, what I want is Maryland's PhD for my graduate study. Study in Maryland can best fit my long-term career objective as a researcher. I'll focus on the area of integrated energy system in my graduate study. I'm very interested in it and a PhD will help me to learn more, esp. Maryland's. Maryland has one of best research centers for this system of the world, and my future advisor, is an internationally recognized expert of it. For learning and researching about this area, I don't think there's anywhere more suitable for me than Maryland.And, this area is very promising and a degree from Maryland will enable me to find a very satisfactory position in a leading company or a government institute in China after graduation. Besides, I've know my future advisor since last fall. After learned something about integrated energy system from a professor in our school, I started to be attracted by it deeply. Coincidentally, Prof. Radermacher came to Shanghai to take part in an academic conference, and that professor recommended me to him then. Then, through e-mail correspondence, I found that he is not only an authority in this area, but also a kind teacher; and also, I learned more about this research center. It's because of that that I determined to spend the next 5 years there. 　

Plans

1, The Chinese government is very interested in this integrated energy system, especially Beijing and Shanghai governments. E.g. As you know, Olympic 2008 will be held in Beijing, and the government is requiring that the facilities should all use this system by then. In Shanghai, government is laying stronger emphasis on energy conservation after the using of natural gas. You know, the gas is transited from west china so it's very expensive. And they are encouraging the using of this system now. Actually, my professor has told me that he is discussing with the government about establishing a research center of it in Shanghai in recent years. As now here is few people verse in this area in China, I think I can get a good position in this research center then. (Show VO the reports if needed)

2, Because it can make energy that would otherwise be wasted in use, and its recycling rate is high, it's can make big profits. So, many big corporations are very interested in it, and, some of them are in the consortium of the research work in Maryland. (Show the VO the webpage if needed) since researchers are important for refining a new technology, yet there are just a few people now very familiar with this area, I do believe that I can get a decent position in one of those big companies here after graduation.